Worst Essay Ever

The essay is here. My comments are as follows:

I read the following article on your website:

http://www.mysistahs.org/features/hiphop.htm

This is quite possibly the most poorly written work ever produced by human beings. I might actually be inclined to agree with your position but the essay was written terribly. You should get a man to proofread your work for you. Just kidding. But seriously, there is no such thing as a collective consciousness (I think perhaps you intended to refer to the “collective unconsciousness” which is also a BS concept). But let me critique specific parts so as not to be overly vague:

Hip-hop culture is frequently condemned for its misogynistic exploitation of women

????

Is there a type of exploitation of women that is not misogynistic??? If not, then your word usage is redundant.

For young people that do not hold sexist ideals, mainstream hip-hop may influence them to do so

This is part of the blank state theory that is really really dumb. Please read “The Blank Slate” by the Harvard Professor Stephen Pinker. This book will ensmarten you.

When going to any hip-hop related event, my friends and I normally expect that we will be disrespected verbally and physically, and have to prepare ourselves accordingly.

And every time I go to a Klan meeting I get called names.

Thirdly, you used the word “misogynist” like a zillion times. Using a word over and over and over and over and over and over and over does not enhance your argument and perhaps actually decreases its efficacy.

In a study done about black male/female relationships of the hip-hop generation, many black men in the hip-hop culture that were interviewed valued economic resources and used these resources as a way to manipulate and control women. And some women negotiated with their bodies for things that they wanted.[4] In order to gain access to these things and to get the love and attention from men that they want, some women felt they must cater to the exploitative images of what men want and think women should be.

This is actually a valid point but it is not specific to only black or hip hop culture. Women have always negotiated sexually for material things. This is true from prostitution to marriage, they are two extremes of the same behavior.

One of the women Vibe talked to is Nikki, a 30-year-old woman who has had many lovers in the hip-hop industry. Vibe said, “…her lovers read like a Who’s Who of rap.”[5] Her reason for partaking in multiple insignificant relationships with rappers was, “I’ve got nothing to offer…No education, no good job, no nothing. So why would a man want me, other than sex? I felt I had to give, so I used myself.”[6] Many women like Nikki are put all of the blame on themselves for being used by men. They assumed and accepted that men would oppress and disrespect them.

Good for Nikki. At least she knows to blame herself for her own actions. After all, at the age of 30 she is not a child. If she did well in life, she deserves the credit. If she acts stupidly, she deserves the blame.

People first need to be made aware that women’s rights are being violated verbally in the sexist lyrics

No no no no no no no no no no no. Please don’t equate free speech with the violation of rights. If somebody uses the word “wetback” or “spic” (I am Latino) that is not a violation of my rights, that is simply somebody being a jackass. If a rapper refers to hoes and bitches, it is the same thing. There is no freedom that violates another freedom.

Each individual can remember the roots of his/her own internalized sexist ideology.

First of all, notwithstanding the misogynistic lyrics of contemporary hip hop, I don’t have an internalized sexist ideology, and even if I did, remembering the roots of it would not be of any particular help to me. Second of all, blah blah blah blah blah.

The worst part of this entire thing is that I actually agree with your main premise which is that hip hop music contains too many messages that disrespect women.

7 Responses to “Worst Essay Ever”

  1. Phelps says:

    In a study done about black male/female relationships of the hip-hop generation, many black men in the hip-hop culture that were interviewed valued economic resources and used these resources as a way to manipulate and control women. And some women negotiated with their bodies for things that they wanted.

    Guess what? They did a study of Bonobo monkeys and found the exact same results. Turns out this isn’t even human nature, it’s primate nature.

  2. R says:

    There can be, in fact, exploitation of women that is not misogynistic. Misogyny is defined as the hatred of women.

    Porn exploits women, but men who look at porn don’t hate women. Hooters exploits women, but guess who’s there all the time? Etc., etc.

  3. R says:

    “…but men who look at porn don’t necessarily hat women…” is what I meant to write.

  4. One could argue that porn, strip clubs and Hooters are all philogynistic to a point. Sure, some women are preyed upon and forced into stripping and porn by men who despise chicks and want to control them, but when I see Miss Jenna Jameson flounce around I get the feeling that she’s wearing the pants in the porn industry. And the chicks at Hooters? Geez. They make great tips. It’s a big deal to be hot enough to be a Hooter’s chick. Those Hooters waitresses are proud of their positions and loooove the notoriety their jobs create. And those centerfolds for Playboy? BIG deal. The biggest life goal for most of those models is to be featured in Playboy. I agree that porn, Hooters, strip clubs, etc… do exploit women, but I also think some of those same women use those venues to exploit men. How many dumbasses have gone into a strip club and actually believed (with the generous help of Jack Daniels) that the girl giving them a lap dance really liked them?

    Typing this is making me hungry. Hooters has yummy wings.

  5. Anglo-Sized says:

    When I was a bouncer I encountered every walk of life from trailer trash to elitist oh-my-God-there’s-no-toilet-covers snobs. Three times during my four year stint I saw a girl get choked/slapped/pushed down by her loving and doting boyfriend. What they all had in common was they were of the ‘hip hop’ ilk. Sadly, and hardly coincidentally, when I intervened, roughly, the girl who was screaming and sobbing from the abuse was now fanatically defending her boyfriend and hitting and screaming at me.
    Is there a vicious cycle that women cannot escape from, or do some of them actually enjoy the negative environment and drama in which they live?
    Why is it Hip Hop that draws all the negative attention for the demoralization and objectifying of women? Some yokel in his trailer is just as likely to beat his common law wife as a wall street executive but I haven’t seen any widespread condemnation.

  6. mexigogue says:

    The vast majority of women who you see getting slapped around are chicks who actually tolerate/enjoy it. Chicks who don’t tolerate it report it first time and get away from the dude. Clearly this one one of the chicks who accepts getting slapped around as an alternative lifestyle choice and by intervening you were interrupting her way of life.

  7. Phelps says:

    but when I see Miss Jenna Jameson flounce around I get the feeling that she’s wearing the pants in the porn industry.

    And when I see Miss Jenna Jameson flounce around I get the feeling in my pants!

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